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No problem DjJean, you have alot of versatile tracks in your portfolio..I wish you many sales! I really like “Lyrics”..very cool track!
beautiful song! I do like this austere arrangement of just vocals and piano..it would be interesting to also hear a fuller arrangement that builds with strings perhaps and light percussion. As it is, it’s great!
The positive for me is the production value as far as the mix/master is high..what is lacking for me is the presence of melodic content. For literally the first full minute there is nothing but kick and high hat. It can be an effective technique to delay melodic gratification for the listener like that, but if one does, the melodic payoff needs to be substantial..that never happens here. The chord progression may have worked better with some form of melodic counterpoint, but left on it’s own merits in the absence of a distinct melody..it doesn’t really resolve for me. Also, overall the beat is a bit mono rhythmic..I would like to hear a bit more poly rhythm. And lastly, that little vocal phrase just doesn’t seem to add to the piece overall.. the song is not “bad”..there are just some things that I think would be good additions to make the song more “complete” to my ear.
The composition as a whole is by no means out of date..what stands out to me is that the piano is the star of this track..you could almost take every other element out of this track and leave the piano and it would be perfect. I would think in terms of “the piano track is already perfect..what can I “add” that will further highlight and support the piano track without overshadowing, obscuring or detracting from it..” The issues with the track are minor and the potential of the track is great..it will be a success for you ultimately.
I’m an American that was raised on blues and rock..and I think you guys are too self conscious about the accent thing..it is truly barely discernible. There is nothing wrong with that track (the vocal track is nominally front and hot, and the guitar solo is slightly hot in the mix) but it’s a great song. The only thing i would say though is it is a “Song”..as in I would expect to hear this on an album..or at a live show..it’s a house rocker. It may lend itself less to a corporate or commercial setting and similar productions. It seems more “soundtrack” material and for this reason may not sell like a hot logo or jingle. Overall, it’s a composition to be proud of though, well done.
I listened to the track a few times. The progression and melody are absolutely beautiful! “out of date” is probably a poor choice of words..the thing is that the piece has so much potential. The piano sounds stunning..and the quality of “cymbal roll” sample actually is markedly lower quality than the fidelity of the piano. Because of that the cymbal detracts greatly from the rest of the song..which is wonderful and very possibly would be a great seller. The other issue with the roll/crash is that it doesn’t sustain long enough..it sounds like it’s cut short and sounds glitchy. Personally, I think the whole piece lends itself to more of an accented percussion rather than a heavy straight ahead percussion like it has..though i do like the snare..I am also not knocked out by the choir on this..I think I’d rather hear that same harmony but with high quality strings (but the choir might be better in a corporate setting..)..these are just my opinions/preferences and I think overall this is a wonderful composition..well done.
I think a critique of your songs would of course be subject to the milieu within which they were to be used..taken out of context and judged solely as “songs” the only criticism I would have is that they are a bit over quantized and slightly formulaic. Taken “in context” though..considering the capacity they would be used in such as a corporate setting or commercial I think it works perfectly. The mix/master is spot on, the melodies and rhythms are engaging and your arrangement of the instruments so as to occupy the whole frequency spectrum but not to clutter any given frequency is absolutely perfect. It’s good solid work.