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UnknownDepths says

danielarto,

Hmm… I think something may be up with the lower text. It’s not a lot of information, yet it’s taking up half of the flyer. I would suggest making the lower text/details significantly smaller in font size.

The styling for “Girlsnight” is very similar to the styling of all of the rest of the text on the flyer. My suggestion would be to try something different with this particular “lead text.”

One of the ideas I see going on with this flyer is a “trinity” concept. You’ve got 3 main models or elements positioned around a triangular design. This is very cool. I’d personally like to see you integrate more focus on this trinity aspect of your design. Many concerts and events use 3 leading artists and/or dj’s in their promotions.

Keep working on it. I’m curious to see where it goes.

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UnknownDepths says

snk-artwork,

Just a quick idea… Perhaps changing the daytime beach theme into a sunset beach theme may make this flyer look extremely different from what’s out there? But that would be a drastic change; especially where colors and backgrounds are concerned.

More subtle changes that could be made to make this look different could be element positioning? Perhaps allow the elements to flow in this manner from top to bottom: Club Name Presents>Cool Party>Model & Exploding Background Elements>Lower Text Area

You may be able to achieve a cool “magazine” kind of look to it by allowing the model’s layer to overlap a portion of the main “Cool Party” text above her. A quicker solution than creating a sunset theme.

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UnknownDepths says

thomask3r,

I kind of like what you’ve got going here. The font you are using is a condensed font; it looks like you are using it with a certain point of kerning. I wonder what the font looks with its default kerning (if this isn’t its default).

I would say adding two things could improve the look of it.

1. A black to transparent gradient from the bottom up, ending at the bottom of the lower text area (or right underneath “First Drink Free.”

2. The inclusion of all white social media icons just above the website address? Perhaps distanced closely together to keep the feel of the condensed font you are using?

The black gradient will help make the website address and social media icons clearly visible. You may even want to play with bordering the entire image with some kind of black gradient border? Or a dark sepia gradient?

I’m also thinking those lens flares you’ve got going on are nice. Perhaps highlighting 2-4 more areas of text with them could work well?

And a question for you… Everything is centered except for the “My Events Presents.” Any particular reason this isn’t centered as well?

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UnknownDepths says

Toivo,

Hmm… “A little busy” aye… Interesting. Maybe a little busy for the tastes of people at envato? It seems there area preferred styles of design here. But I wonder what would happen if more different styles of design were accepted at Graphic River. It may open up even more purchasers to their marketplace.

I’ve been getting input from a number of people. I’m just going to see how much it all says about these particular pieces of design.

Thanks for the good luck!

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UnknownDepths says

I actually think it would be cool if it were a two color logo. Something where the sun’s center is one color and its corona another. This two color combination may work well if it were reproduced in the text. The top being the corona color and the bottom being the sun’s center color? Ideas to play with and test.

Aside from that, I think this logo’s element alignment and placement needs some alteration. Lining up the text to the right of the sun would be really well done if it both upper and lower text fit into an area the exact height of the sun image.

If you keep it all one color, see what adding some gradient might do to it.

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I’m submitting these to Graphic River right after posting this! I’m also going to link them to this thread to let the reviewers see what others have to say about all of these designs; in hopes that it aids in making a more sound decision about their approval…

THE PLAN:

Promote and sell products on the Graphic River market place by using other, directly related products, that can be used hand in hand with an overall promotion. The flyer sells the facebook timeline cover image, and the other vector mascots; and vice-versa. Pretty clever, but I’ll have to see whether or not everything gets approved?

What are your thoughts?

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UnknownDepths says

Just a thought…

I wonder what would happen if you used your second design as it is, but changed the image of the product to something that fits the composition and color-scheme of your design. Trying to keep some perspective on things, if I were to look at your design without the product you’ve placed there, I would be scratching my head at what kind of product your layout and theme would work well with or promote.

Try changing the color of the phone’s body to one of the colors you’ve got in your color scheme. This seems like a design that should be tailored to an exact product; not something that is universal to all products…

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UnknownDepths says

Hmmm… Look at the second version of this flyer, I’d definitely agree on removing the stroke to the text. You may want to make the text darker in color (a dark shade of blue?) and add a white gradient from the bottom up, ending at the top of the lower clouds. This will make darker text visible without the need of stokes.

You’ve named it “Winter Party” so I would try to make some of the “exploding elements” resemble things from winter. Snow flakes, ice cubes, light colored birds etc; may work a well with the wine/champagne glasses you’ve added.

Keep us posted on your progress.

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UnknownDepths says

I like the narrow nature of the arrows in these sliders; and the darker transparent black behind them. These work well in my opinion. I’m thinking that somehow you may want to implement/add more of this contrasting darker black transparency with the lighter black transparency, in your sliders’ overall designs. Your design is very minimal in nature so I’m not sure how you would do this… Or if you even need to. But I feel that may add a little something to the mix.

I would also suggest changing the caption font to something that is a little more slender and representative of the other font you have used in your design. I’m thinking Century Gothic or something of that nature. Also, for the caption font, you may want to “justify” the text for a cleaner more precise distribution and feel within the area. It looks like it’s just centered right now.

Maybe adding some kind of border or vertical line to separate the caption text and computer image might work too. Perhaps this is something you can try playing with the background transparency color with (as mentioned in the first paragraph)?

Update us with your progress!

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UnknownDepths says

With the style of flyer you are going for, it seems that you were trying to use the Police Car as one of a number of “exploding elements” that draw the viewer’s attention to the model. Since the Police Car is large and there aren’t many more “exploding elements” aside from the street light and the weather balloon, the look and feel you are going for (that many other flyer of this theme type share in common) doesn’t seem to match with what others have put out. I think ToivoMedia is right concerning the font styling for this. I would try to do something that resembles the style of the background photo you have here. A style that’s kind of grungy and dirty, yet maybe somehow clean at the same time?

The lower flyer is getting there… I would say do something with all of the text below the word “Latin” for this. I think the stroke around the lower text isn’t working in your favor; especially since it’s seriff font. Perhaps try a sans-seriff font for this and see what you come up with. I wouldn’t use strokes on seriff typefaces, unless it was something ingeniously designed; or if it were extremely tiny. If you wish to stick with seriff type do away with the strokes.

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