With the style of flyer you are going for, it seems that you were trying to use the Police Car as one of a number of “exploding elements” that draw the viewer’s attention to the model. Since the Police Car is large and there aren’t many more “exploding elements” aside from the street light and the weather balloon, the look and feel you are going for (that many other flyer of this theme type share in common) doesn’t seem to match with what others have put out. I think ToivoMedia is right concerning the font styling for this. I would try to do something that resembles the style of the background photo you have here. A style that’s kind of grungy and dirty, yet maybe somehow clean at the same time?
The lower flyer is getting there… I would say do something with all of the text below the word “Latin” for this. I think the stroke around the lower text isn’t working in your favor; especially since it’s seriff font. Perhaps try a sans-seriff font for this and see what you come up with. I wouldn’t use strokes on seriff typefaces, unless it was something ingeniously designed; or if it were extremely tiny. If you wish to stick with seriff type do away with the strokes.
- Nun Kwon Dethsp
Hey your words, opinion and critique is very much appreciated. Thank you. In regards to the background… What do you think about using only the “Icon Tiled” backgrounds (3rd row under the “31 High Definition Backgrounds” section in the promo flyer or the 2nd preview shown under the flyer).
The reason these were provided was to enable users to achieve a cohesive look amongst all slides, should the user wish to have this option. The default background in the master template is one that is water-like and abstract in nature (seen in the first example of the 2nd row under the “31 High Definition Backgrounds” section in the promo flyer).
It seems that many people feel serif typeface doesn’t work with the overall theme I was trying to go for here. Hmm…
I’m happy to have received your response. Thanks again. I will take everything into consideration.
- Nun Kwon
Thanks for the input. I was considering blurring the background or screening it with something… This “messy” thing is intriguing to me. I’ll have to see how else something of this visual theme can be ordered. It all looks pretty straight forward and organized to be, but that’s why I need eyes like yours and others for critique.
Very much appreciated.
- Nun Kwon
Thanks for the reply!
Are sans-serif fonts the only style of fonts GraphicRiver prefers users to use? I’m not sure if serif font style is out-of-date… They seem to work with this template but I will give the sans-serif style a try.
Use some “float?” What exactly is meant by “float?” Sounds like html coding.
- Nun Kwon
HEEEEELP ! HEEEEEELLLLLLP!
I’m here from Unknown Depths curious of what fellow graphicriver designers may have to say about our double-rejected PowerPoint Presentation: Water Cities.
Here is the second rejection notice:
Unfortunately your submission Water Cities – PowerPoint Presentation isn’t quite ready for GraphicRiver and requires significant improvements and changes before it can be resubmitted and reconsidered.
Additionally, we have some extra feedback for you:
This presentation need work with it’s typography, layout, colors, style and composition.
Work on the typography by tweaking the text, try with different fonts and different font sizes to get a better look and feel of the text.
It’s layout look “messy” due to the intensity of the backgrounds, colors and effects used.
Colors used don’t match nor blend very well in certain areas and need a closer look.
It’s styling for the icons need a second look over, it look outdated and lacks composition with it’s colors and styling.
It’s composition in general requires a lot more work before we’re able to reconsider it for GraphicRiver and the overall look and feel is outdated compared to our requirements.
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Thanks for your submission! - The Envato Marketplaces Team
Here is the promo and a couple of screen shots. I feel so “out-dated” as a designer! :^(
Any and all feedback, criticism and opinions will be very well received. Thanks GraphicRiver community!
- Nun Kwon