Hard to say anything from a tiny screenshot.
Honestly, looking at this you really need to forget about themes and submissions and go back to the drawing board.
Read articles on Smashing Magazine and A List Apart etc… learn about basic design principals, color theory and as you say, hierarchy, rhythm and typography, then spend a minimum of 12 months learning and refining those skills.
Not a chance sorry.
You have typography, spacing and hierarchy issues and the design is very, very dated, looks like you designed this back in 2000.
Study design more, checkout trends on dribbble then give it another shot.
As Charlie said, plus you have a mismatch of designs going on.
Typography and spacing is the main issue here.
Didn’t you already ask for advise on this one, then didn’t like the advise and deleted the thread.
You’ve not made any improvements since the last time, not good enough at all.
Contact the author.