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Gigguk says

Title of the thread says it all.

Preview of the item:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UxzDWoU5Zek
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Gigguk says

anyone please?

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mothinkers says

Hi loosecontroi,

First of all, Welcome to VH. :)
I like the concept of your work but i find it too simple to be accepted. Usually title sequence are longer. What I don’t like about your work are the revealing animation of the titles. In my opinion they’re too simple and everything feels a bit static.. The style you’re using let me think about an Action/Epic sequence but animation doesn’t.

Also you shold put some music/SXF in your preview, it will help a lot.

That’s just my personal opinion, maybe more navigates authors can give you some better advices on how to improve it.
Good Luck
Federico

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Gigguk says

Hi loosecontroi,

First of all, Welcome to VH. :)
I like the concept of your work but i find it too simple to be accepted. Usually title sequence are longer. What I don’t like about your work are the revealing animation of the titles. In my opinion they’re too simple and everything feels a bit static.. The style you’re using let me think about an Action/Epic sequence but animation doesn’t.

Also you shold put some music/SXF in your preview, it will help a lot.

That’s just my personal opinion, maybe more navigates authors can give you some better advices on how to improve it.
Good Luck
Federico

Thank you! Your opinion is very precious. Especially when not many people visit this part of the forum. Can you take a look at this project too please ?

http://videohive.net/forums/thread/how-is-this-project/102193
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Gigguk says

Hey ! I took your advice and made the titles longer. I added 2 additional texts and improved the transitions of the texts. And I also added sound fx and fixed the “static” part ! Is there anything else you recommend of changing?

New preview here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r6iasJC0e-0
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