Feedback on first Item

Hi,

I’ve been buliding a small Countdown template. It got rejected for general aesthetic reasons, visual hierarchy, typograph and so on. I would apprechiate your feedback where is room to improve my template. I thought about the logo and the subscribtion form/button.

Here is the direct link to the Demo

Or a screenshot:

Greetings, Nils

To my eye it is very good work.

A couple of things: subscribe field needs styling (at least 1px grey border), borders of slider controls would look better if they will be lighter, icons are not super (may be something more stylish/interesting– stitched ones like your ribbons for example?), I would add styled tooltips to icons but the fact that you have not forgotten to add <title> is quite good! And text demands improvements–paragraph sits too close to the heading, oblique/italic is not that good here, try normal font-style or another font maybe. Text block is the weakest part of your overall well-done work.

More love for the typography (bold italic is never looking good) and other, more homogeneous icons (e.g. those: http://iconsweets2.com/) and you’re good to go. Your typography ruins the fabulous graphics.

-Scott

Thanks for your feedback! I’m working on it and look forward to reupload my item.

There is the update: Demo Rejected once again: “Every aspect of your design will need to be improved, significantly.”

Would be happy about some more feedback. So long, Nils.

Here you go, I hope it will help you..

Something more like this would be going in the right direction:

Email me hello[AT]ikreativ[DOT]com and I’ll send you the .PSD of the quick mockup of this.

-Scott

Sent. Hopefully the .PSD will help you improve the item enough to be approved!

Good luck.

-Scott

Thanks! Is still feel a bit uncomfortably, the Item I sell should be my work. Scott, can you maybe explain me what you think makes your sketch more likely to be approved? Should I remove the gallery and slider to concentrate on the essential parts (countdown and email subscribtion)? And then of course focus on typography, alignment and asthetics. I am uncertain what to do right now. If it is worth the effort to try to make it fit the quality standards. Right now it seems that my template just sucks.