Could anybody please help? I know I’m not going to get it approved as it is now, so I want some feedback.
Sorry dude, but its bad.
EVERYTHING need work, design, typography, spacing.
Go back to the drawing board, learn more about design. Study sites like Dribbble, Creattica etc..
You definitely need some inspiration. I suggest reviewing the other 404 pages for sale here on TF.http://themeforest.net/category/site-templates/specialty-pages/4-4-pages