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thomask3r says

So I’ve been working on some flyer for a couple of weeks now, and I never got happy with any results. About 15 hours work which turned out as garbage.

But then finally I made this one, and I think it might have a chance. I think I’ve improved alot lately.

Please let me know what you think! :)

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Graphic-Studio says

Sorry, but I don’t think it will pass the review.

It’s just plain, and not much happening in the background.

It’s too light and not very impacting to view at.

All of the fonts are hard to read.

At the bottom the fonts are too close to the cut line.

The date needs a treatment of some sort, maybe a box to highlight it.

The Girls are too Pure and need to be more aggressive.

The Headline in the center is too LIGHT and needs to POP more.

HEY : My stuff isn’t the Greatest ( Yet! ) – But those are my first impressions.

Hope it helps.

I get lot’s of help here in the Forums too!

Would love to see some changes, especially a darker background in the same venue.

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thomask3r says

Allright. Seems like it needs alot of improvements:p

thanks for the feedback!:)

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Amrhamza says

not bad wayy better from your first , keep on working on itl

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thomask3r says
Amrhamza said
not bad wayy better from your first , keep on working on itl

Thanks Amrhamza!

Here’s a little update, not done, tho’:

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chrisatlemon says

Getting better, keep working on it!

I think at the moment it still looks a little bit too much like: “take a background and paste some things on top”. It doesn’t look like one flowing design, more like piecework. Somehow it needs to flow together more.

Cheers

Chris

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thomask3r says
chrisatlemon said
Getting better, keep working on it!

I think at the moment it still looks a little bit too much like: “take a background and paste some things on top”. It doesn’t look like one flowing design, more like piecework. Somehow it needs to flow together more.

Cheers

Chris

Thanks:)

It’s not done, so I’ll keep on working! Thanks for the feedback.

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quickandeasy Volunteer moderator says

You need to focus more on including detail. Everything looks rushed and half-done.

The chrome effect around the pictures, the gloss on the pictures, the text effects, the background – everything looks rushed with very little thought gone into it.

Make sure you refine every element so it is as good as it can be.

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Amrhamza says
quickandeasy said
You need to focus more on including detail. Everything looks rushed and half-done.

The chrome effect around the pictures, the gloss on the pictures, the text effects, the background – everything looks rushed with very little thought gone into it.

Make sure you refine every element so it is as good as it can be.

totally agree

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Pickoora says

THe fonts in the bottom of the design are all quite different—try and keep them the same and the drop shadow on the text looks distract and not very pleasing.

There is also alot of pictures; think about the buyer- would he want to pay for 5 pictures? or minimize the amount he has to pay and buy another file with only 1 or 2 main images. Also, do the squirrels come with the flyer?

Thats all I’ve got to say, it looks alright but recently the reviewers haven’t been accepting night-club-ish files which yours I think would come under—so try something original :)

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