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lou606 says
Hi folks, While i m waiting for the review of my first item which will most certainly be rejected, I’ve been very hard working on this one for days and i ‘d like to have your professional eye on it. Here is the link: http://s1295.photobucket.com/user/Lionel_Laboureur/media/reach-for-the-Moon-Flyer_zpsb131181c.png.html?sort=3&o=0 I d like you to give me some good tips in order to improve my flyer and myself by the way :) I m a beginner on designing as i got into this wonderful hobby 4 month ago.
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ToivoMedia says

Like with your other one, I think the concept and basic layout are quite good. But the typography is too simple and needs to be improved. :)

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unlockedart says

Simple typography…Agree with Toivo. The bottom text just fades into the background and is lost. Overal concept of your flyer is really good just work on the text.

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lou606 says

Thank you very much guys! I’ve made some improvement. Can you please tell me if the typography is better? Can i submit it, or do you still think that more change must be done?

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ToivoMedia says

The large title looks better, but I don’t think the small text is too good. I don’t think the heavy shadow on the bottom text looks that good.

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lou606 says

Thanks Toivo for answering that fast and your precious advices. You’re helping me a lot. Do you mean all the small text or just the “& her orchestra” , which one i recognized i ‘ve been playing around for quite some time without real satisfaction . Im out of ideas for this one. i’ll come back later with a fresh head.

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ToivoMedia says

Yes I think all the small text has problems. Also the font you’ve used for most of it, I’ve seen used a lot for flyers. So there is a danger that it will not be considered unique enough for the marketplace. Also yes the & her orchestra text doesn’t fit very well at the moment. :)

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lou606 says

Hi again, So, here is the latest version. Hopefully, it got better. What do you think?

http://s1295.photobucket.com/user/Lionel_Laboureur/media/la-diva-moon-A4_zpsaf492266.png.html?sort=3&o=0
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lou606 says

I again did other improvements. I think i’m quite happy with it. Is there anything else i can do?

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ToivoMedia says

I think the retro style of font is quite a good choice. But I don’t think the text is standing out very well, it needs to pop out more and be easier to read. :)

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