The reviewer probably wants you to provide 2 EPS – one with editable font and another with outlined font.
I will prefer to see the badge with the texture like your first one.
I like that you added the ball thing to fill up the emptiness. Try make it dynamic. Currently, both looks the same size to me and seems duplicated. Try give them different blur and sizes to depict different depth. You can have 1 clear and the other blur as well.
You need to work on your typography. Currently, you are using too many different fonts. Compare ‘monday’, ‘12.24.2012’, ‘presented by: your sponsor’ and ‘party’. All of them are different fonts and it creates a distraction. There isn’t a dominant font throughout and it seems that everyone of them are fighting for attention. In a good design, you need to have a dominant and sub-dominant elements. Dominant element are the main focus while the sub-dominant compliments the main. I will suggest using only 2 different fonts throughout the design. Use 3 if you are confidence with what you are doing.
All the best.
PS: Sorry for my bad english.
I think you need a lot of work for this one before it can get approved(Sorry for being blunt). Try looking at the flyers around here and see their standard. I will try give some advices that might help:
1. Currently everything looks very flat even for the main text that has the layer style applied. Try giving it more depth. A lot of the flyers here has it. Try see how they do it. Look up some layer style tutorial online that uses depth.
2. Your design is somehow out of the box with its composition and layout. That is good but until it carries a sense of balance, your design will look out of place and not aesthetically pleasing. Hence, the easy way out is to keep everything centralize. You can never go wrong with that.
3. I will say if you are designing a portion for the buyer to place the photo. Put the photo in so that they have a sense of how it looks. Don’t put the word ‘photo’ there.
4. I am never a fan of warped text especially in a 2D design. Most of the time, it never looks good because it creates an imbalance to the design. I will say do away with that. Keep your text as it is.
In short, look at other flyers here and analyze them. Understand why they look good and you can learn from there. All the best.
PS: Sorry for my bad english.
Some photo manipulation I did.
Details at http://glenngoh.deviantart.com/art/The-Last-Day-331993932
Text at the bottom should be align to the center. Text above the social media icons are currently aligned slightly to the right. The last social media icon is also aligned to the right. Spacing between the 3 different social media aren’t consistent.
The words ‘The Dance Off’ needs more work. Also try pushing it down to give spacing on top of it. Now it’s too close to the edge.
The blue and green gradation doesn’t blend very well giving the feeling that they are being forced together. Try choosing some other colors that can contrast better.
All the best.
Use only 1 alignment for the text. “Your Company Name” and “www.yourcompany.com” are aligned to the center while your other text aligning to the right. If your text is on the right, align all to the right, it will look nicer.
Increase the tracking of “Your Company Name” and “www.yourcompany.com”. Give them some breathing space between letters.
Color choice for your $150 gift card doesn’t contrast very well. Try sticking with white for the text like the other cards or choose something that contrast better.
Not a fan of the font you use for the logo but not sure if that affects. Try use some icon to compliment instead. That will probably look nicer.
Lastly. Frest or Fresh?
After looking into the image and analyzing the distribution of the pixels, I did a cross analysis to the images in the database and finally found a match to what you are looking for. Not sure if I can post the link but try searching “Boreal Sessions Flyer” here.
I have gotten several freelance jobs from DeviantArt and a few directly from graphicriver. I didn’t really spend much time uploading design on those sites. Probably take me about 10-20 minutes for every new design.
However, I guess my real intention for uploading to those sites isn’t really to get new jobs but rather to showcase my work and probably inspires people. Getting new freelance jobs from those sites probably come as a bonus to me.
I guess you shouldn’t see it as a waste of time. Probably to look at it as a common workflow for every new design. Don’t you want to showcase your work to more people.
Thanks sir for the encouraging words. I totally agree that the quality of the files here has been improving tremendously. This definitely benefits the buyers as well as the authors.