I dont understand mby something…
For me the ribbon is far away from acceptable:
ok, ribbon is changed, thx!
mby something else?
Honestly, the whole thing looks like copy and paste of various elements to me, but not one flowing design. Somehow it doesn’t feel connected.
Sorry I can’t be more precise, it’s just a feeling I’m having when I see it.
ok chris, how about exampel?
Thumbs up for the lady with the “attitude”
I would spend taking the time to refine all the elements used. It looks as though you’ve very quickly thrown everything together, as @chrisatlemon said.
Also, the font could do with some work. Maybe keep it for the feature text, but the rest – it’s hard to read.
Focus on including detail.
Here’s an example from the this and last week’s top selling Xmas flyers:
Look how crisp all the elements are, look at the detail – there is so much flexibility for the customer, where as right now, yours looks rather bland in comparison.